Sharing your bio with someone who is meeting you online for the first time can be eye opening.

Here is a bio that was shared with me by email in anticipation of a recent teleclass.   What I did upon receiving it was check out the website and see what more I could learn to help bring an even more compelling, credible story.  My goal was to search for the stunning results, the sassy sound bites, the succinct stories, and the social information to help ideal clients connect with this individual.

Here you will see the “before” bio provided by the teleclass guest and the “after” bio I created by skimming the website looking for the pearls.  Please note that I never spoke to this teleclass guest.  I upgraded her bio just by reviewing the content she made available on the web.   Most prospects don't want to go hunting for all the good information.  After all, you only get one time to make a first impression.  My belief is you should tell your best story without having to ask people to look for more information.

In the “Before”  bio, the client only shares her first name.   She doesn't immediately make clear who her target audience is.  She states what she believes, but she doesn't offer proof from happy clients or the media that she delivers what she promises.  Stunning results are missing.  She also doesn't mention whether or not she is happily married as proof that she is successful following her own advice.  The bio doesn't make clear the primary ways that clients can engage with her.  The “after” bio addresses these missing pieces.

Before:

Catherine is a gifted teacher, speaker, seminar leader and coach who has been helping people find True Love for over 30 years.  She believes that the Truest of Love is Self Love and that Self Love is Irresistible.  Support successful single women in their 40's and 50's who can manifest everything but love, Catherine shows them how to attract the highest and best in the men they meet.  She likes to call herself the Soul Mate Magician because she teaches a woman to give her heart away and keep it at the same time.   Ready for magic?  Check out https://AttractYourSoulMateNow.com.

After Extreme Bio Makeover

Successful single women in their 40's and 50's from all over the USA who can manifest everything BUT love are happily singing the praises of Soul Mate Magician Catherine Behan.  Catherine's unique take on the Law of Attraction has guided hundreds of women to stop getting dumped and start loving life by inviting the highest and the best from the men they meet.  Catherine discovered her gift for bringing out the best in people seeking love as as a 12-year-old who had an intuitive ability to wave her magic wand to bring the right people together.  Today — through workshops, private coaching, and radio interviews — this modern-day Cupid joyfully spreads her magic dust to show love seekers how to find what they are looking for in themselves and others so they can live happily ever after at long last.  Happily married to her soul mate, Catherine has “been there and done that to find and nurture true love.” She can't wait to show you how so you can, too.  Visit www.attractyoursoulmatenow.com to learn more.

Authentic Visibility Question of the Day: How do you think these two bios compare?  Is the “after” bio better?   And if you believe it is, tell me why.  More importantly, does your bio showcase the essential pearls about what you bring to your ideal clients so they learn everything they need to know and want to pick up the phone, visit your website, or meet you in person to explore winning ways to work together?   If not, take another shot at telling your story to inspire action among your ideal clients.   It's a great exercise that delivers results you will feel in your business.  I promise!